Thursday, July 21, 2011

Do you like the beginning of my story?

You did a good job on characterization and bringing the feelings of the characters to the readers, but I am not inclined to read any longer. The baby's dead, then what happens? I feel bad for the characters, which is good, but I don't know why I should keep reading, you need to add a bit of suspense to keep the readers interested.

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